Hi Aimee this is Michael from Yaldhurst Model school It is a really good story and I love it and I wish that was me. But I think that you need to put some writing at the top so that we now what the story is all about and some questions at the botten.In the story there is a fool stop mistake, it is were it says "dog. so when" it does not have a capital letter and the start of the sentence. Kind regards Michaela
Hello Aimee, Its me Bridget here from Yaldhurst Model School.(Rimu Class) I like how you have made a slide with your writing on it. I also really like the way you have added/ made a border/ background. This is really cool how pasionate you are about getting a surf board. Maybe next time you could tell us why you wrote this. But other then that Good job. Bridget.
Hello Bridget, It's Aimee Thank you for our comment I really appreciate it. I think they really improve my blog posts, next time I will make sure to tell everyone why I want a surfboard. Hope to see you back on my blog soon - Aimee
Hi Aimee this is Michael from Yaldhurst Model school
ReplyDeleteIt is a really good story and I love it and I wish that was me.
But I think that you need to put some writing at the top so that we now what the story is all about and some questions at the botten.In the story there is a fool stop mistake, it is were it says "dog. so when" it does not have a capital letter and the start of the sentence.
Kind regards
Michaela
Hello Aimee,
ReplyDeleteIts me Bridget here from Yaldhurst Model School.(Rimu Class) I like how you have made a slide with your writing on it. I also really like the way you have added/ made a border/ background. This is really cool how pasionate you are about getting a surf board. Maybe next time you could tell us why you wrote this.
But other then that Good job.
Bridget.
Hello Bridget, It's Aimee
DeleteThank you for our comment I really appreciate it. I think they really improve my blog posts, next time I will make sure to tell everyone why I want a surfboard.
Hope to see you back on my blog soon
- Aimee